I have a lot of thoughts. I hope they are useful. :)
ARRANGEMENT COMMENTS:
00:00 - 01:23 The melody has great potential for emotional instrumentation. Good placement of build-ups, good "bridge".
01:23 - 01:50 Choir notes are a bit repetitive for how much the choir stands out in the mix. I love the guitar.
01:50 - 02:05 My favorite part! Beautiful! Tears!
02:05 - 02:18 Nice resolution.
02:18 - 02:45 Perfect place to repeat the melody and build to the end. Love it.
DETAIL COMMENTS:
00:00 - 01:23 The strings sound kinda weak; The same exact slow attack on every note is weird. Also, there could stand to be more variation in loudness of notes, particularly coming up to the build-ups at 00:55 and 01:23. Also, 00:58 - 01:23 sounds like an exact copy of 00:00 - 00:28 - even listening casually my ears want a bit of variance there. I think a new harmony track or some gentle percussion would do the trick.
01:23 - 02:18 More of the sound (maybe just high frequencies?) seems to be coming from the left channel. It seems crowded, particularly because of the choir, particularly between 01:23 and 01:50. (Some people mind this, but I actually often like it.) I think the choir sounds slightly delayed, but I can't really tell.
02:18 - 02:45 Same comments on the strings as before. The ending has a great sound.
OTHER COMMENTS:
Nice track picture. :)