You've got good ideas and good instruments. The instrument from 01:06 to 01:56 is annoying, sounding like it is screaming inside of my head, in contrast to all the more mellow other instruments playing "in front of" me. I wonder if equalizing out some of the higher frequencies from it would help? Or adding a touch of reverb? Maybe there is too strong of a stereo effect going on? I'm not really sure. The music at around 02:18 is nice.